IELTS Essays Band 9 | IELTS Writing 9.0

2024-05-27 16:40:17 Adding Transitions into Your Sentences

— The U.S. produces over 2.2 billion tons of wheat every year. In
contrast, Russia produces just over half a billion per year.
— Italy produced large amounts of dairy products. In comparison,
— Thailand produced very little.
— Finland imports some 10 million tons of flour per year, but produces none.
Note: remember the word some can be used to mean about/ around, so you can use it to add some variety into your writing.


While/Whereas/Although/Though

These words are great for adding transitions within sentences
without having to add a full stop and write a new sentence. They
allow you to compare and contrast while keeping your text fluid and
readable.

— Although Italy produces over 6 million tons of olives, Spain
produces almost double that amount.
— Spain produces high levels of solar power, whereas/while Japan
produces almost none.
— While Germany consumes nearly 80 million tons of rice per year, it
produces none.

Comparing and Contrasting Similar Data: the same, like, likewise, / similarly, both

— Austria produced the same amount of butter as Switzerland.
— Like Thailand, Malaysia produces 30,000 bottles.
— India consumes over 100 million tons of rice per year; Likewise, / Similarly, China consumes 118.8 million.
— Both India and China consume over 100 million tons of rice per
year.
— Both the UK and Spain produce medium levels of carbon emissions.

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2024-05-24 08:11:13 Definitions for some difficult "IELTS writing task 1" words

Dipped – Fell slightly but recovered quickly;

Bottomed out / Hit a low of – The lowest point on the
graph;

Plummeted to…/ Plunged to – Suffered a quick and drastic or shocking decrease. Fell extremely quickly. A very quick and large drop or reduction;

Fluctuated/ was erratic – Increases and decreases randomly, irregularly or unpredictably;

Rose/increased dramatically/ Soared/ Rocketed – Increased very quickly and drastically;

Peaked at / reached a high of – The highest point on the graph;

Remained constant/unchanged/stable at …./ Levelled off/evened out at … – a part of the graph where there is no change;

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2024-05-23 16:30:24 Ideas about "Global Issues"

Problems in Developing Countries
Developing countries face a range of problems.
Standards of healthcare and education are low.
Life expectancy is usually lower than in developed countries.
There is a lack of infrastructure, employment and good quality housing.
Many people are forced to live in poverty.
Food, drinking water and basic medicines are in short supply.

How to Help Developing Countries
The best form of help for developing countries is development aid.
Richer nations can help by investing in long-term projects.
Governments and charities can help by building new houses and schools.
Globalisation may also help developing countries.
Multi-national companies are creating jobs in developing countries.
On the other hand, many people emigrate to find work in richer countries.
They often send money back home to their families.
This money helps to improve the standard of living in developing countries.

Immigration
Some people move to another country in search of a better life.
Many immigrants come from less developed countries.
Richer, industrialised countries may offer opportunities for employment.
Free healthcare and schooling are available in some developed countries.
Other people migrate to a foreign country to improve their academic qualifications.

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2024-05-21 16:29:05 ​​ Map

Q: The maps below show the changes in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam.

Answer:

The pictures illustrate a number of important changes which took place in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam.

From the maps, it is clear that the most noticeable change that occurred in the town was that of a huge lake. Additionally, the forest and farmlands had completely disappeared by 2010.

In 1990, there was an ancient structure and a forest with rare flora and fauna to the west of the river, and irrigated farmlands to the east. However, with the construction of a dam wall, those features disappeared beneath a large lake, which also became a fishing area in 2010.

Looking at the maps in more detail, while the mountains still existed, the villages in the far east were relocated further south of the mountains, and a large hotel was built in their place. Meanwhile, a hydroelectric power dam was constructed with a wide range of electricity pylons appearing nearby.

Total words: 153

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2024-05-19 16:30:33 Map of The Model Essays

Essay 1 - 10 Essay 11 - 20
Essay 21 - 30


Essay 31: Nowadays in some countries children are given fewer responsibilities compared to the past. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay 32: "In most countries, prison is the most common solution for the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with better education so that they do not become criminals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?"

Essay 33: The charts below show the number of working hours per week, in industrial sector, in four European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.

Essay 34: In the future, it seems it will be more difficult to live on the Earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching other planets to live, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Essay 35: In some parts of the world it is becoming popular to research the history of one’s own family. Why might people want to do this? Is it a positive or negative development?

Essay 36: The graph below shows the sales of children's books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay 37: The land for parks is wasted and should be used for other purposes. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay 38: Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other kinds of aid could be provided?

Essay 39: Some people think that intelligence is innate while others think that we can improve our intelligence through learning. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Essay 40: Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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2024-05-17 16:31:17 The Short Journey

A young lady sat in a bus. At the next stop a loud and grumpy old lady came and sat by her. She squeezed into the seat and bumped her with her numerous bags. The person sitting on the other side of the young lady got upset, asked her why she did not speak up and say something.
The young lady responded with a smile:
"It is not necessary to be rude or argue over something so insignificant, the journey together is so short. I get off at the next stop."
This response deserves to be written in golden letters:
"It is not necessary to argue over something so insignificant, our journey together is so short"
If each one of us realized that our time here is so short; that to darken it with quarrels, futile arguments, not forgiving others, discontentment and a fault finding attitude would be a waste of time and energy. Did someone break your heart? Be calm, the journey is so short. Did someone provoke or intimidate you? Be calm, forgive; the journey is so short. Did someone betray, bully, cheat or humiliate you? Be calm, forgive; the journey is so short. Whatever troubles anyone brings us, let us remember that our journey together is so short.

No one knows the duration of this journey. No one knows when their stop will come. Our journey together is so short. Let us cherish friends and family. Let us be respectful, kind and forgiving to each other. Let us be filled with gratitude and gladness. If I have ever hurt you, I ask for your forgiveness. If you have ever hurt me, you already have my forgiveness. After all, Our Journey Together is so Short! God bless you!
Have a safe journey!

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2024-05-15 16:22:04 ​​So you want to score a band 8 on IELTS Writing? #part2

1-3 Tips above

. Write about what you know

You are being tested on the quality of your English, not on the quality of your ideas. So you shouldn’t worry about finding the “right answer”. You need a simple idea that you can clearly describe and justify.

. Follow the standard structure

To get maximum points, you should follow the standard structure. IELTS Writing task 1 should be written as follows:

Introduction: briefly describe what your graph shows.
Overview: state main trends.
Specific details: describe specific changes, providing data.

Learn more about structuring Academic Writing task 1.
IELTS Writing task 2 answer should have such backbone:

Introduction: rephrase the topic + give your opinion.
Body paragraphs: each should have its central idea, which is generally stated in the first sentence.
Conclusion: just rephrase your opinion from the introduction.

. Don’t write too many words

It’s a bad idea to write more than 300 words in task 2 and more than 200 words in task 1. Firstly, it’s difficult for the examiner to read long essays and he/she will check your writing less carefully. Secondly, you are likely to make more mistakes and have less time to check what you wrote.

. Choose your writing style

Never use informal language in academic writing or in essay. Only in general module task 1 you may be asked to write an informal letter.

. Don't learn model answers by heart

Do not memorize model answers - you will receive less points for such essay. The chance of getting exactly the same essay as you've learnt is very small. And going off topic will result in achieving a low score. So instead, spend some time learning to adopt advanced vocabulary to make it fit into your answer. This way you'll be able to use various words phrases in different writings and show your broad range of vocabulary.

. Don't branch off!

Write only according to the theme. Do not include irrelevant information. If you wander from the subject, you'll get a much lower score even for a well-styled answer.

. Write clearly and coherently

Do not repeat yourself with different words, avoid being redundant. Also, make sure that each paragraph in Writing task 2 has a central idea. It's very important for IELTS Writing that every paragraph in you essay is clearly separated and has its main thought. This simple thing makes your essay neat and coherent.

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2024-05-13 16:31:02 Useful Vocabulary & Expressions of #Essay296

to unite - to join together as a group, or to make people join together as a group; to combine
ex: If the opposition groups unite, they may will command over 55 percent of the vote.

boundary - the limit of a subject or principle
ex: Electronic publishing is blurring the boundaries between dictionaries and encyclopedias.

simultaneously - happening or being done at exactly the same time
ex: The network was broadcasting four games simultaneously across the country.

famine - a situation in which there is not enough food for a great number of people, causing illness and death, or a particular period when this happens

transcend - to go further, rise above, or be more important or better than something, especially a limit

Effect - to achieve something and cause it to happen

capacity - a particular position or job
ex: in someone's capacity as something She guides tourists at the Martin Luther King Jr. Birth Home in her capacity as a National Park Service ranger.

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2024-05-10 16:30:42 Ideas about "Gender (Males and Females"

Gender and Education

Men and women should have access to the same educational opportunities.
Males and females should be accepted onto courses according to their abilities.
It is wrong to discriminate against students because of their gender.
Gender should be irrelevant in education.
Students’ achievements should depend on hard work and individual merit.

Gender and Work

Men and women should have access to the same professional opportunities.
Both men and women should be able to pursue a career.
They should earn equal salaries.
They should be employed according to their abilities, qualifications and experience.
Traditionally, women have been restricted to certain roles.
They were often employed as secretaries or receptionists.
Nowadays, a range of occupations is available to both sexes.
Career success depends on individual merit.

Women’s and Men’s Role in the Family

Some people argue that a mother should not work.
She should stay at home and bring up her children.
The father should be the breadwinner of the family.
Others believe that both parents should share these responsibilities.
Working women can take maternity leave during and after pregnancy.
Many mothers continue to work after this period.
Many fathers and mothers share their parenting and domestic responsibilities.
They contribute equally to childcare, cooking and cleaning.
Some women may have better career prospects than their husbands.
Paternity leave and “househusbands” are becoming more common.
Traditional gender roles are gradually changing.
Families can divide roles and responsibilities in the most convenient way.

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2024-05-08 17:30:01 ​​#Essay296 #Writing #Task2

Agree / Disagree

Q: Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Answer:

It is often said that music has the power to unite and connect people, regardless of their cultural backgrounds or ages. I completely agree with this view, and will give my reasons below.

Music can certainly reach across cultural and national boundaries and bring people together. Perhaps the best example of this would be the Live Aid concerts that took place back in the 1980s, and which were broadcast to a global audience. Two live events were held simultaneously in the UK and the US, and the objective was to raise funds for famine relief in Ethiopia. The concerts were a huge success, both in terms of the number of people around the world who watched them and their impact on international public awareness of the famine. They demonstrated, I believe, that music truly is the planet’s global language.

Just as it transcends cultures, music also has the ability to connect people from different generations. Regardless of age, we can all enjoy a memorable melody, a strong rhythm or a beautiful singing voice, and the best songs seem to have the same magical effect on all of us. This would explain why televised music competitions, such as ‘The X Factor’ or ‘The Voice’, are such popular prime-time shows. These programmes attract incredibly broad audiences because singing and popular songs appeal to children, parents and grandparents alike. I would argue that no other form of entertainment can bring families together in this way.

In conclusion, I believe that music is unique in its capacity to create shared experiences between people, irrespective of culture and age.

Total words: 265

Band: 7.5+

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