2021-11-12 10:53:30
The world would be a better place if we all spoke the same language. Do you agree?
As the world becomes more interconnected with the growth of the Internet and cheaper travel, it is important to examine the concept of a universal language. There are benefits in terms of travel and business, but a common language threatens a loss of culture and identity.
Firstly, a common language would mean there are no language barriers. Travelling to different countries would be easier and more accessible. In business, there would be less danger of misunderstandings. Furthermore, in situations of conflict where there are multiple troops from different countries, it would be easier for them to work together if they all spoke one language.
However, this would mean the loss of all other languages as they become unnecessary. Language is tied to culture. Through speaking a language one is projecting cultural history and identity. Moreover, the way language changes reflects both the history of a society and the current culture. Loss of a language means the loss of an important part of the culture.
Additionally there is evidence to show that language is linked to the way people think. People who speak multiple languages alter their thought process when they switch languages. The entire world speaking one language eliminates diversity of thought, threatening future development and invention.
In conclusion, although a universal language might make the world easier in terms of cooperation, it would not be a better place. It would mean the loss of culture, identity and diversity of thought. In the long term, these losses outweigh the benefits.
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Task achievement
She answers the question and all her points are relevant. (I’m not sure I see the point about ‘multiple troops’, though.) She gives examples and ideas to support her points, for example three ideas to support the point about language barriers.
Cohesion and coherence
The structure is good with a clear introduction, three body paragraphs each dealing with one point, and a clearly stated conclusion. She makes good use of signpost words like firstly, however, moreover and in conclusion.
Lexical resource
There is a good range of vocabulary and the words are used correctly. Examples: language barriers, diversity of thought, cultural history and identity, universal language.
Grammatical range and accuracy.
Good use of conditional structures in paragraph 2: a common language would mean…, there would be less danger…, Tenses are used correctly throughout. Accurate use of complex sentences and relative clauses: there is evidence that shows that language is linked to…
Score:
This candidate has produced a very good essay and could be awarded an IELTS Writing band score 8.
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