IELTS Essays Band 9 | IELTS Writing 9.0

2021-10-01 18:47:47 ​​#Writing9 #TopTips #Task1

Prepositions in describing trends - Part 1

Using prepositions accurately plays a significant role in describing trends and charts as the meanings conveyed could slightly differ with different prepositions.

Prepositions “Between X and Y”/“from X to Y”

Ex: The line graph shows the amount of household expenditure on different items between 1995 and 2005. (implying a period)
The line graph shows the amount of household expenditure on different items from 1995 to 2005. (Implying a period While the prepositions are different, these two sentences are the same in meaning.

The preposition “in”

Ex: There was an increase in the number of cars on the road in Britain. There was a decline in the percentage of cinema-goers. There was a rise in the amount of natural gas produced in 2010. There was a significant drop in shopping for luxury items. In all the sample sentences above, the preposition “in” shows a general change in something where no specific data is given.

The preposition “to”

Ex: There is a marked reduction to 20% of the amount of time playing sports. The price of oil had considerable growth to 32$ per barrel in 2007. Both sentences above show a decline or an increase to a specific amount, so the preposition “to” is used.

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2021-09-29 18:03:49 ​​​​​​​​​​#Essay148 #Writing #Task2

Agree / Disagree

Q: Children today play video games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Answer:

Nowadays, most children regularly play games on a computer or on their television. These games have become more violent over the past few years. In fact, many parents worry about this and the effect these games are having on their children. Some are concerned that playing violent games might encourage them to become more aggressive in real life. What we need to establish is whether or not this is true.

First it might help to look back at the games that children used to play many years ago before the invention of computers. In those days, children would probably have played games such as Monopoly or chess, or may have played card games or some type of outdoor sport. These sports or games would probably only have encouraged children to become more competitive rather that violent.

However, through history children have always played fighting games with toy or pretend weapons. Even now, many parents will buy a toy gun or sword for their child. Why do we never read reports in the media about the impact plastic weapons could have on children? Perhaps because the link between play fighting and actual fighting is not very strong.

In conclusion, the way children play games has changed with the times but the ideas behind those games have actually changed very little. Just as playing as soldiers did not increase violence in the past, I believe that playing computer games will not lead to an increase in violence in future. I think if we look more closely at life in our major cities, then we would find that there are many other possible causes for the increase in crime and violence.

Total words: 278

Band: 8.0+

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2021-09-27 20:00:00 ​​​​​​​​​​​​​​#Essay147 #Writing #Task1

Pie chart

Q:The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.

Answer:

The pie charts compare visitors’ responses to a survey about customer service at the Parkway Hotel in 2005 and in 2010.

It is clear that overall customer satisfaction increased considerably from 2005 to 2010. While most hotel guests rated customer service as satisfactory or poor in 2005, a clear majority described the hotel’s service as good or excellent in 2010.

Looking at the positive responses first, in 2005 only 5% of the hotel’s visitors rated its customer service as excellent, but this figure rose to 28% in 2010. Furthermore, while only 14% of guests described customer service in the hotel as good in 2005, almost three times as many people gave this rating five years later.

With regard to negative feedback, the proportion of guests who considered the hotel’s customer service to be poor fell from 21% in 2005 to only 12% in 2010. Similarly, the proportion of people who thought customer service was very poor dropped from 15% to only 4% over the 5-year period. Finally, a fall in the number of ‘satisfactory’ ratings in 2010 reflects the fact that more people gave positive responses to the survey in that year.

Total words: 193

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2021-09-27 18:31:05 #GeneralTips #Writing #Task2

How to Write an Essay 1: Essay Types

In general, there are four types of argumentative (persuasive) essays.
1) experience & example
2) prefer
3) agree/disagree
4) compare and contrast or advantages and disadvantages

With the first three essays, it is easier to write a five paragraph essay.

5 paragraph essay (experience & example, prefer, agree/disagree) Intro – The paragraph should be at least 3-5 sentences.
Support 1 - The paragraph should be at least 3-5 sentences. Support 2 - The paragraph should be at least 3-5 sentences. Support 3 - The paragraph should be at least 3-5 sentences. Conclusion-The paragraph should be at least 3-5 sentences.

Sometimes it is easier to write a four paragraph essay:

4 paragraph essay (compare and contrast, advantages and disadvantages) Intro – The paragraph should be at least 3-5 sentences.
Advantages-The paragraph should be at least 3-5 sentences. Disadvantages-The paragraph should be at least 3-5 sentences. Conclusion-The paragraph should be at least 3-5 sentences.

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2021-09-25 14:01:06 ​​​​​​​​​​#Essay146 #Writing #Task2

Agree / Disagree

Q: The advantages of robots doing the basic serving functions in the entertainment, leisure and retail sectors of the economy outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Answer:

With the use of robots in manufacturing now a fact of life, we are now moving towards a time in which the retail and service industries are replacing workers with robots as well. Whilst there are some clear benefits for employers, I feel that overall their use would be disadvantageous, particularly for consumers or employees.

At face value it is easy to see why many industries are turning to robots. With today’s technology, it is possible to produce machines that can accomplish many of the tasks that humans do. What is more, from an employer’s perspective, robots are economically a better proposition in that they do not require wages, they do not get sick and they do not take industrial action against their employers.

However, using robots to build cars is one thing. Using robots in service industries is a very different matter. Whilst it can be argued robots could manage basic service functions, such as selling tickets or even preparing food and drinks, these are not the only service roles performed by entertainment, leisure and retail workers. These industries are all based on making consumers feel looked after, which requires the human touch. Can robots effectively deal with complaints from dissatisfied customers? Would a robot be able to effectively be able to advise a consumer on the product that best suits their sense of style or personality? The answer is probably no to both questions. In addition, the use of service robots would rob many unskilled workers of potential employment, putting a strain on the economy and reducing the overall amount of disposable income for leisure pursuits.

In summary, whilst it is clear that there are some limited advantages to having service industry robots, given that such industries are very much based on providing an enjoyable customer experience, the lack of human interaction would outweigh this in my opinion, and be ultimately detrimental to the service they are offering.

Total words: 320

Band: 8.0+

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Discuss both views

Q: Many people believe that modern music can have a negative impact on the young. Others believe the effect of modern music is positive. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Answer:

Music has changed dramatically over the years and new types of music are constantly appearing. Many people feel that current popular styles, such as rap, are just noise and cannot be considered real music, unlike older styles, such as rock and jazz.

Firstly, many people, especially those from older generations, feel that modern types of music can be more harmful than positive. They will say modern music is too simplistic and the song lyrics are potentially dangerous. They feel that rap and hip-hop often deal with dangerous issues such as gang violence or express antisocial views. It is a common opinion that this can be damaging for young people who listen to such songs.

On the other hand, it is important that people be able to listen to the types of music that they prefer; you cannot control people’s tastes or opinions. For young people especially, popular music is an important aspect of identity as sharing an interest in music with their peers brings a sense of stability and belonging. These young people would argue that the lyrics to these songs reflect the modern reality and it is an important way of expressing their experiences and the emotions that are hard to verbalize.

In conclusion, people will always prefer a certain type of music. They will always be unsure of new things, which they may not understand, and this can be the case with music. However, we cannot stop change and we should not try to; instead, we should encourage new styles of music as all music adds to the wealth of our culture.

Total words: 264

Band: 7.5+

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Problem / Solution

Q: Obesity is a serious problem in many countries, especially in rich countries. Discuss ways to solve the problem. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Answer:

With the advent of urbanisation and the rise in popularity of fast food, there have been accompanying issues with rising obesity rates – especially in developed countries like Britain and the USA. After providing a careful analysis of why obesity has risen so sharply in these countries, I shall suggest a number of ways in which the obesity epidemic can be ameliorated.

To begin with, it should be unsurprising that fast food is incredibly popular in wealthy countries (like Britain and the USA). Due to the high levels of development in these countries, consumers possess more money and can therefore consume vast amounts of fast food without seriously diminishing their income. For example, the American Dietary Association found that, compared to the average Indian household, the average American household’s budget for food is six times larger per month. Consequently, it is to be expected that obesity rates are much higher in countries with larger amounts of wealth.

Despite the severity of the obesity problem, however, there are a number of ways in which developed countries could battle it more effectively. Firstly, developed governments could put far more pressure on fast food outlets to provide healthy alternatives to hamburgers, french fries and soft drinks. Secondly, public exercise initiatives could be advertised and promoted far more vigorously. Lastly, modules that inform teenagers about healthy dietary requirements could be taught at schools.

In conclusion, although obesity is a serious issue in the developed world, if the above steps are taken, the situation will surely improve in the coming years.

Total words: 256

Band: 7.5+

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