IELTS Essays Band 9 | IELTS Writing 9.0

2023-11-10 14:36:13 ​​#Essay276 #Writing #Task2

Advantage / Disadvantage

Q: It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Answer:

As technology has developed, people can now travel to remote natural areas. While this trend is beneficial to some extent, I would argue that its disadvantages are more significant.

On the one hand, visiting isolated natural places has some benefits. Firstly, this is a newer and more interesting type of travelling. Since going to other cities or countries has been too common for most people, it might be more exciting for them to explore new places such as the South Pole or the Amazon rainforest. This gives them valuable experiences and unforgettable memories. Secondly, when visiting remote areas, people, especially scientists, might acquire more knowledge about the natural habitat. For example, when coming to the North Pole, scientists can learn about the life of polar bears which live far away from humans.

On the other hand, I believe this development has far more drawbacks. The first one is that travelling to remote natural areas can be risky if the travellers are not sufficiently prepared. For instance, the temperature at the South Pole is usually very low, which adversely affects people's health. Travelling to forests can also be dangerous as people have to face the risk of being attacked by animals. Also, since visiting isolated places often requires a large amount of investment in researching and ensuring the safety of travellers, the costs of travelling tend to be high. Therefore, it seems like only scientists and rich people can afford this activity, so this development is likely to benefit only a small group of individuals.

In conclusion, I believe the disadvantages of people being able to travel to remote areas outweigh its advantages.

Total words: 272

Band: 7.0+

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2023-11-08 15:45:56 ​​#Essay275 #Writing #Task1

Bar chart

Q: The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990.

Answer:

The three bar charts show average years of schooling, numbers of scientists and technicians, and research and development spending in developing and developed countries. Figures are given for 1980 and 1990.

It is clear from the charts that the figures for developed countries are much higher than those for developing nations. Also, the charts show an overall increase in participation in education and science from 1980 to
1990.

People in developing nations attended school for an average of around 3 years, with only a slight increase in years of schooling from 1980 to 1990. On the other hand, the figure for industrialised countries rose from nearly 9 years of schooling in 1980 to nearly 11 years in 1990.

From 1980 to 1990, the number of scientists and technicians in
industrialised countries almost doubled to about 70 per 1000 people. Spending on research and development also saw rapid growth in these countries, reaching $350 billion in 1990. By contrast, the number of science workers in developing countries remained below 20 per 1000 people, and research spending fell from about $50 billion to only $25 billion.

Total words: 187

Band:

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2023-11-06 19:00:26 IELTS Writing Task 1

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2023-11-04 15:41:00 ​​ Hi guys!

: Just a quick tip about the word 'government'.

A lot of IELTS essays require you to talk about appropriate responses to social issues. As a result, it is natural to talk about the role of government in society.
This means you need to use the word 'government' correctly, but I see a lot of people make mistakes with this word. Here are some basic rules to follow.

. Only say 'the government' when the reader knows which specific government you are talking about. Sometimes 'the government' can refer to the conceptual idea of government, but usual this isn't the most natural choice.

. Say 'governments' when speaking generally. Honestly, in most cases, you will be giving general recommendations for what governments should and should not do, so in most cases, this plural form without an article will be your best choice.

. Only say 'government' when referring to government as a concept. For example, in the above sentences you might have seen me use the expression 'the role of government'. I'm speaking in a very conceptual/abstract context here, so that's why I'm not using the plural form. Too often people use this uncountable form when they are talking about what real governments should be doing. Try not to make this mistake.

P.s: Knowing these differences should help you become just a little more accurate in the future. I hope this tip helps.

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2023-11-02 16:02:42 ​​ Useful Vocabulary & Expressions of #Essay274

fact of modern life - true about the world now
stored online - kept on the internet
physical books - real books
negative overall - bad in general
obvious conveniences - clearly helpful
supporters of this trend - those in favour of it
point to - argue about
numerous ways - many methods
disseminated - spread around
almost universally accessible - nearly used by everyone
narrowing socioeconomic differences - less difference between classes
allowing for - opening up the possibility of
first of all - firstly
relevant information - what you are looking for
search engines - Google, etc.
wide range of sources - many places to find information
user-generated sites - websites where people visiting create the content
news outlets - the media
academic journals - formal papers, magazines
locates - finds
search within - find inside of
share - give to others
more than would be possible - couldn’t happen with
hard copy - real edition
nonetheless - regardless
encourages - makes people want to
dependence - can’t stop using
harmful - injurious
a given topic - whatever they are looking up
check out - take out
expert - person who knows a lot
process - steps
possibility of bias - maybe prejudiced
conscientious - careful
patiently - slowly and carefully
fuller, more nuanced sources - more complete articles, books
hastily written - quickly written
attract more clicks - get more people to go to it
generate advertising revenue - make money
tap into - exploit
addicted to devices - can’t stop using phones
lacking - not having
healthy habits - good habits
engendered by - created by
despite - regardless of
handiness - convenience
human psyche - human mind, psychology
on level - overall
counter - fight against
potentially injurious - effects possibly harmful results

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2023-10-30 15:05:57 ​​#Essay274 #Writing #Task2

Advantage / Disadvantage

Q: In the past, knowledge was contained in books. Nowadays, knowledge is uploaded to the internet.
Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Answer:

It is a fact of modern life that most information today is stored online, rather than in physical books as it was in the past. In my opinion, this is a negative overall despite its obvious conveniences.

Supporters of this trend can point to the numerous ways knowledge kept online can be disseminated and used. Online information is almost universally accessible, narrowing socioeconomic differences in society and allowing for various conveniences. First of all, users can find relevant information on search engines from a wide range of sources including user-generated sites like Wikipedia to news outlets like The New York Times and academic journals as well. Once an individual locates the information they are looking for, it is also easier to search within that article, share it with others, have it wherever they go and store more than would be possible if it were a hard copy.

Nonetheless, storing information online encourages a dependence on computer technology that is harmful for the human mind. In the past, if a person wanted to research a given topic, they would have to check out a library book or talk with an expert. This process was much slower and open to the possibility of bias. However, it also meant that individuals were more conscientious and patiently learned from fuller, more nuanced sources. Nowadays, most people read short articles, hastily written to attract more clicks and generate advertising revenue. These tap into a fundamental human need to be constantly engaged and feeling pleasure. Over time, this has led to a generation addicted to devices, lacking the healthy habits engendered by careful research and study.

In conclusion, despite the handiness of online information, the impact on the human psyche makes this a negative trend on level. Individuals must themselves find ways to counter these potentially injurious effects.

Total words: 302

Band: 7.5+

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2023-10-28 20:50:59 Hi everyone

A lot of people ask me about the breakdown of how the writing is scored. There are a few basic things you need to know.

Each writing task is broken down into four separate band descriptors - TA, CC, LR, GR (see https://takeielts.britishcouncil.org/sites/default/files/ielts_task_2_writing_band_descriptors.pdf)

For each task separately, you will be given a score between 1 and 9 for each band. These four band scores are then added up, divided by four, and ROUNDED DOWN. In other words, a 7,7,6,7 would equal a 6.5 for the task.

Your overall score for each writing task is then put into the table in the picture shown below to give your overall writing score.

I've seen versions of this table online that are incorrect. Most of those ones are too generous. The real table, as shown below, rounds things down. For example, 6.5 in task 1 + 7 in task 2 = 6.5 overall.

Your overall writing score is finally added to your other overall scores (speaking, reading, listening), divided by four and then ROUNDED UP.

In other words, 7,7,6,7 would equal 7 as your final IELTS score.

I hope that clears things up a bit.

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2023-10-26 15:59:04 ​​ _Hi team

_ IELTS Writing: Cohesion and Coherence (CC)

As most of you know, one of the four criteria that examiners score you on for your writing is 'cohesion and coherence'. This has to do with how naturally and logically your ideas flow. There are a few particular features that examiners are looking for. I've talked about many of these before, but today I want to focus especially on 'cohesive devices'.

Cohesive devices are words like 'thus, this, this noun, in addition, furthermore, however, firstly, secondly, nevertheless, therefore' ... and many more.

It's expected that you have these throughout your writing, and it is more than likely that your writing already uses these. However, there is some interesting wording when it comes to interpretations of what it should look like. In the explanation for band 7, there is reference to overuse; in the explanation for band 6, there is reference to 'mechanical' styling.

Why is any of this important?

The reality is that sometimes students get overly formulaic with their writing. They use a basic 'cohesive device' before every sentence. There are so many essays that look like this.

Body 1:

Sentence 1 - Firstly, ...
Sentence 2 - For example, ...
Sentence 3 - Therefore, ...

Body 2:

Sentence 1 - First of all, ...
Sentence 2 - For instance, ...
Sentence 3 - Thus,

When your essay looks like this, it's very easy for the examiner to decide your flow of ideas is 'mechanical' and give you a 6 maximum for CC.

In fact, the notes to examiners say explicitly that writing that has each sentence starting with something like 'firstly, for example, for instance, in addition, thus, therefore, however' is more likely to be found at lower levels (around 5 - 6). In contrast to this, higher levels will not have to rely on these expressions at the start of their sentences.

You can see this in the description of a band 9 essay which says "uses cohesion in such a way that it attracts no attention". In other words, the best essays don't have these expressions all the time.

In summary, how does this apply to writing?

My advice is to keep using these cohesive devices, but simply don't use them before every sentence. Work on having maybe half your sentences not starting with a 'Therefore, / Firstly, / In addition,' style openings. Just doing this will make sure that you aren't putting a ceiling on your CC score.

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2023-10-24 15:59:20 ​​#Essay273 #Writing #Task1

Mixed

Q: The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children’s sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period.

Answer:

The line graphs show the average monthly amount that parents in Britain spent on their children’s sporting activities and the number of British children who took part in three different sports from 2008 to 2014.

It is clear that parents spent more money each year on their children’s participation in sports over the six-year period. In terms of the number of children taking part, football was significantly more popular than athletics and swimming.

In 2008, British parents spent an average of around £20 per month on their children’s sporting activities. Parents’ spending on children’s sports increased gradually over the following six years, and by 2014 the average monthly amount had risen to just over £30.

Looking at participation numbers, in 2008 approximately 8 million British children played football, while only 2 million children were enrolled in swimming clubs and less than 1 million practised athletics. The figures for football participation remained relatively stable over the following 6 years. By contrast, participation in swimming almost doubled, to nearly 4 million children, and there was a near fivefold increase in the number of children doing athletics.

Total words: 185

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