IELTS Essays Band 9 | IELTS Writing 9.0

2023-12-11 19:06:28 ​​#Essay279 #Writing #Task1

Mixed (The graph and table)

Q: The charts compare the amount of water used for agriculture, industry and homes around the world, and water use in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo.

Answer:

It is clear that global water needs rose significantly between 1900 and 2000, and that agriculture accounted for the largest proportion of water used. We can also see that water consumption was considerably higher in Brazil than in the Congo.

In 1900, around 500km³ of water was used by the agriculture sector
worldwide. The figures for industrial and domestic water consumption stood at around one fifth of that amount. By 2000, global water use for agriculture had increased to around 3000km³, industrial water use had risen to just under half that amount, and domestic consumption had reached approximately 500km³.

In the year 2000, the populations of Brazil and the Congo were 176 million and 5.2 million respectively. Water consumption per person in Brazil, at 359m³, was much higher than that in the Congo, at only 8m³, and this could be explained by the fact that Brazil had 265 times more irrigated land.

Total words: 184

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2023-12-08 16:55:36 ​​ Definite article: Other uses

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2023-12-05 18:12:11 ​​ Hi team

Here's another little writing tip

When we want to explain ideas in our writing, we often do this by providing a series of examples. For instance, I might say that I enjoy '... reading, writing and listening'.

What I see students doing a lot is saying things like "... people should exercise, watch less tv, use a trainer, go running, wake up early every day, eat well and do weights if they want to stay fit."
The reality is for a sentence like this, you are providing too many examples. 3 is the magic number of examples in English. If you provide more than 3 in a series, you are probably just wasting time you could be using on explaining your point with more substance and detail.

Remember, we write series as 1, 2 and 3. Don't go beyond this.

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2023-12-01 18:01:04 ​​ Useful Vocabulary & Expressions of #Essay278

plastic containers - bags, bottles, boxes, etc.
ubiquitous - common
recent decades - last 30 or so years
potential drawbacks - possible disadvantages
outweigh - stronger than
environmental cost - hurts the environment
disposable plastic containers - single-use plastics
massive - huge
put into - added to
biodegradable - break down over time in nature
eco-friendly paper - paper that is biodegradable
cardboard - stronger paper
arrival - onset
on two major fronts - in two main areas
fossil fuel byproduct - comes from fossil fuels
requires crude oil - needs oil in its raw form
production - making of it
emissions gases produced
often cited as - commonly regarded as
chief contributor - main cause
hastening of climate change - speeding up of global warming
moreover - also
landfills - trash put in the ground
polluting previously pristine land - contaminating nature
end up - finally
forming ‘land masses’ - making big collections
injurious - harmful
marine life - sea animals
nonetheless - regardless
concomitant problems - related issues
listed above - mentioned before
override - be stronger than
usefulness - convenience
uniform consistency - all the same
adopted by - used by
fast food giants - fast food restaurants
local grocery chains - supermarkets
savings - not wasting money
passed on to the consumer - customers also save money
enjoys - receives
less likely to rip open won’t tear
spill - fall out of
make use of them afterwards - use them again
banned - not allowed
lose these - conveniences not have the benefits
radically alter - change a lot
undermine their value - hurt their importance
average customer - a consumer
explore innovations - find new ways
environmentally friendly - good for nature

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2023-11-29 17:10:17 ​​ IELTS Simon Writing Task 1 Lessons Collection - Best ever

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2023-11-27 19:48:49 ​​#Essay278 #Writing #Task2

Advantage & Disadvantage!

Q: In many countries, plastic containers have become more common than ever and are used by many food and drink companies.
Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Answer:

Using plastic containers for various food products has become ubiquitous in recent decades. Though this has potential drawbacks for the environment, I believe it does not outweigh the benefits to businesses and individuals.

The environmental cost of disposable plastic containers is massive. Before plastics, foods and drinks were typically put into biodegradable, eco-friendly paper or cardboard. The arrival of plastics has impacted the environment on two major fronts. Firstly, plastic itself is a fossil fuel byproduct that requires crude oil for its production and later transportation. The emissions from fossil fuels are often cited as the chief contributor to the hastening of climate change. Moreover, the containers themselves either find their ways to landfills, polluting previously pristine land, or end up in the ocean, forming ‘land masses’ that are injurious to marine life.

Nonetheless, the concomitant problems of plastic containers listed above do not override their usefulness. For companies, using plastic containers is cheap and allows for uniform consistency. This is the reason why they have been adopted by companies ranging from fast food giants like McDonald’s to local grocery chains. This savings is then passed on to the consumer who enjoys cheaper prices and the many conveniences of plastic containers. They are less likely to rip open and spill compared with paper and most families make use of them afterwards for leftover food. If plastic containers for food items were banned not only would people lose these conveniences but many companies would have to radically alter their packaging, and potentially, products themselves.

In conclusion, the environmental impact of plastic containers does little to undermine their value for both corporations and the average customer. It is instead important to explore innovations to make plastics more environmentally friendly.

Total words: 287

Band: 7.0+

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2023-11-23 16:31:15 Writing task 1

This pdf is a great help to understand the vocabulary to us for describing the graphs

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2023-11-21 18:27:50 ​​ Hi guys

Another grammar post.

A very useful grammar structure that is particularly handy for expanding on ideas is the conditional structure.

Conditionals are basically sentences that use the conjunction 'if' (there are a few other types including 'unless' sentences).

There are five main kinds of conditionals. These are known as zero, first, second, third and mixed. The good news is that for IELTS essays, you probably only need to learn two or three of them.

The structure for the zero conditional is 'If' + S + present tense, S + present tense. This structure is used to talk about facts. Here's an example zero conditional sentence.

'If a country is poor, there is usually more crime.'

The structure for 1st conditional is 'If' + S + present tense, S + future. This structure is used to talk about cause and effect relationships. For example;

'If a country doesn't invest in education, it's population will not be able to escape poverty.

In rare cases, you may need 2nd conditional. The structure for this is 'If' + S + past, S + would verb. This one is used to describe imaginary situations. For example;

If his country had more vaccines, it would be able to deal with CoVid-19 better.

Honestly, trying to use 3rd and Mixed conditionals in essays is a recipe for mistakes. People often learn these fancy structures and try to force them into their essays. I've never seen them used naturally - not even once. In other words, don't even try to use these for your essays.

In summary, conditionals are a great way to show advanced grammar ability and expand on ideas. Just use the basic conditionals though as the complex ones will get you in trouble.

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2023-11-15 16:20:58 ​​ Hi guys

Let's talk about coherence and cohesion in writing task 2.

This post is for people who really care about the tiny details of essay structure. Honestly, for most people this is not a major thing, however it is an important point.

There is a little element of the band descriptors for writing task 2 that has always interested me. That point is the band 6 CC criteria which states.

"cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical"

I fully understood 'faulty' - meaning errors - but I've never been sure exactly what 'mechanical' is or how it is interpreted by examiners.
Recently, I've got a little more advice on this by examiners who state that this 'mechanical' issue is occasionally due to 'overuse' of 'cohesive devices'.

The question then becomes, what is a cohesive device? Cohesive devices are expressions and words that we use to link our sentences and ideas to each other. Such words include 'Firstly, For example, However, this noun (referential), In addition, Furthermore, which, so, thus etc etc etc.

The examiner I spoke to gave me the advice that your whole essay shouldn't be full of 'Firstly, Secondly, First of all, Second of all, In addition, Furthermore, For example, For instance at the start of every new idea.

I've mentioned this before that it is not always necessary to start your ideas with one of these words, but it was confirmed to me that you genuinely shouldn't (always), otherwise you run the risk of sounding 'mechanical due to overuse of cohesive devices'.

I'm not saying that you shouldn't use words like 'Firstly or Secondly'. I just wouldn't be using them in every paragraph or before every idea. Use other natural ways to start your ideas. Sometimes it's fine to just jump into your idea without any 'cohesive device' and just let context take care of it.

P.s: I hope this is useful. I think it is important information to those especially who are trying to reach 8s or are IELTS teachers who follow this page.

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2023-11-11 18:07:07 ​​ Useful Vocabulary & Expressions of #Essay276

isolated: far away from any others
Example: isolated rural areas

common: happening often, existing in large numbers or in many
Example: Jackson is a common English name.

adverse: negative and unpleasant
Example: Lack of money will have an adverse effect on our research program.

ensure: to make sure that something happens or is definite
Example: The book ensured his success.

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