IELTS Essays Band 9 | IELTS Writing 9.0

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Line graph

Q: Internet Users as percentage of population

Answer:

The line graph compares the percentage of people in three countries who used the Internet between 1999 and 2009.

It is clear that the proportion of the population who used the Internet increased in each country over the period shown. Overall, a much larger percentage of Canadians and Americans had access to the Internet in comparison with Mexicans, and Canada experienced the fastest growth in Internet usage.

In 1999, the proportion of people using the Internet in the USA was about 20%. The figures for Canada and Mexico were lower, at about 10% and 5% respectively. In 2005, Internet usage in both the USA and Canada rose to around 70% of the population, while the figure for Mexico reached just over 25%.

By 2009, the percentage of Internet users was highest in Canada. Almost 100% of Canadians used the Internet, compared to about 80% of Americans and only 40% of Mexicans.

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2023-12-26 17:00:35 ​​ Hi guys

Here's a quick tip to improve your vocabulary.

The word 'get' is used constantly in English. There are many many different contexts in which we can use the word.

However...

You could argue that 'get' is a bit informal. It is also a word that takes away your opportunity to show variety and precision in your language.

With that all being said, try to replace get with other natural collocations. For example instead of saying:

- get a job
- get a cold
- get a bag
- get your point
you could say...
- find a job
- catch a cold
- purchase a bag
- understand your point

Just this little difference can show the examiner that you know a variety of collocations and are able to know the difference between formal and not so formal writing.

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2023-12-26 16:00:43 IELTS Speaking - Part Three Sample Answers

1. Bringing up Children
2. Getting Lost
3. Clothes
4. Information
5. Memory
6. Games
7. Shops
8. Inventions and Inventors
9. Public transport, driving a car
10. Books
11. Living on your own
Topic 14: popularity, famous people
Topic 15: Movies
Topic 16: helping others, volunteering
Topic 17: Living in the city, accommodation
Topic 18: Adventures
Topic 19: Making decisions
Topic 20: Money
Topic 21: Water activities, water transport
Topic 22: Communication
Topic 23: Queues, crowds of people
Topic 24: Career
Topic 25: Traditional festival
Topic 26: Sports, keeping fit
Topic 27: Art and design
Topic 28: Photography
Topic 29: parties
Topic 30: Parks
Topic 31: Cooking and food
Topic 32: Science
Topic 33: Rules
Topic 34: Relationship loneliness
Topic 35: Changes
Topic 36: Waiting
Topic 37: Service
Topic 38: Athletes, Sport
Topic 39: Computers
Topic 40: Advice
Topic 41: Success
Topic 42: Cities, historical places
Topic 43: Ideas and opinions
Topic 44: New things, tourism
Topic 45: Advertising
Topic 46: Feeling proud, challenge, rewards
Topic 47: Languages
Topic 48: Feeling tired
Topic 49: Success
Topic 50: Adventure, risk, stress
Topic 51: History Open / Comment

2023-12-25 21:51:30 ​​ IELTS Simon Writing Task 1 Lessons Collection - Best ever

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2023-12-22 19:15:02 ​​ Analysis

1. Heavy investment in sports facilities aimed at professional athletes is common in countries that want to compete in international events. 
2. This is a positive development for national pride but negative on the whole as it takes funding away from the average citizen.

Paraphrase the overall essay topic.

Write a clear overall opinion. Read more about introductions here.

1. Proponents of this practice would argue that it brings the nation together. 
2. The best examples of this relate to international competitions like the summer and winter Olympics. 
3. China and the United States have famously invested millions in building sports facilities for prospective Olympians and the results in terms of medals justify the expenditure. 
4. The wider implications for national unity come from an entire country watching the telecasts and rooting together. 
5. Divisive domestic disputes are temporarily forgotten as everyone focuses on the progress of their country. 
6. Much of this would be impossible without specialised sports facilities for the best competitors.

Write a topic sentences with a clear main idea at the end.

Start an example.

Develop the example.

Continue developing it.

Keep developing it and don’t switch to a new main idea.

Relate it back to your topic sentence.

1. However, these facilities benefit a select few over the majority. 
2. Funding for such facilities is a limited part of a federal budget that must cover essential areas like health, education, and the military. 
3. Any money diverted towards preparing world-class athletes for international competitions is to some extent a waste as it cuts into the budget for facilities for average people. 
4. For example, many inner city youths in poorer neighborhoods lack access to parks and such facilities and this has been identified as one of the factors that allows for poverty to be inherited over generations. 
5. Direct the funding away from these expensive gyms for top athletes and it would be possible to build many more facilities that serve a much wider and underserved segment of the population.

Write another topic sentence with a new main idea at the end.

Explain it.

Begin to develop it.

Use a specific example.

Conclude with a strong statement.

1. In conclusion, despite the less tangible benefits to national cohesiveness, this a negative on level as it favours a talented minority. 
2. More resources should be allocated towards facilities for those in greater need.

Repeat your opinion and summarise your ideas.

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2023-12-19 19:30:34 ​​ Useful Vocabulary & Expressions of #Essay280

heavy investment - a lot of money put into
aimed at - for
compete in international events - the Olympics, World Cup, etc.
national pride - caring about your country
negative on the whole - bad on level
takes funding away from - diverts money from
average citizen - normal person
proponents - advocates
practice - development
brings the nation together - unifies the country
international competitions - Olympics, World Cup, etc.
summer and winter Olympics - held every 4 years either in the summer or winter
famously invested millions - well-known put lots of money into
prospective Olympians - potential Olympic athletes
justify the expenditure - good reason for the money
wider implications - larger effects
national unity - bringing a country together
entire country - whole nation
telecasts - TV broadcasts
rooting - wanting to win
divisive domestic disputes - dividing arguments in a country
temporarily - not permanent
focuses on - directed towards
progress - moving forward
much of this - a lot of
specialised sports facilities - just for doing sports
best competitors - strongest athletes
a select few - some of
majority - most of
limited part - small piece of
federal budget - money the government has to spend
cover essential areas - have money for important parts
diverted towards - sent in the direction of
world-class athletes - best sports people
to some extent - to a degree
waste - not used well
cuts into - takes away from
inner city youths - kids living in the city
lack access - can’t go to
identified - pinpointed
one of the factors - one element
poverty to be inherited over generations - families staying poor over time
direct - send towards
wider - broader
underserved - don’t get enough
less tangible benefits - not as concrete advantages
national cohesiveness - brings a country together
on level - overall
favours - benefits
talented minority - just some people with a lot of ability
resources - money, time, etc.
allocated - sent to
greater need - more important for

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2023-12-17 16:54:31 ​​ Figure out means to find a solution to a problem or answer to a question by thinking carefully or using a process of logical reasoning.

Here examples:

1. I need to figure out a solution.
2. She was trying to figure out the answer.
3. I’m trying to figure out how to do it.
4. I’m trying to figure out what went wrong.
5. We need to figure out a way to fix this.
6. He figured out the answer in no time.
7. We have to figure out a way to make it work.
8. She’s trying to figure out the right way to do it.
9. He’s trying to figure out how to explain it.
10. They’re trying to figure out a way to solve the problem.

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2023-12-13 20:00:51 ​​#Essay280 #Writing #Task2

Positive & Negative

Q: Some countries invest in specialized sports facilities for top athletes but not for the average people.
Is this a positive or negative development?

Answer:

Heavy investment in sports facilities aimed at professional athletes is common in countries that want to compete in international events. This is a positive development for national pride but negative on the whole as it takes funding away from the average citizen.

Proponents of this practice would argue that it brings the nation together. The best examples of this relate to international competitions like the summer and winter Olympics. China and the United States have famously invested millions in building sports facilities for prospective Olympians and the results in terms of medals justify the expenditure. The wider implications for national unity come from an entire country watching the telecasts and rooting together. Divisive domestic disputes are temporarily forgotten as everyone focuses on the progress of their country. Much of this would be impossible without specialised sports facilities for the best competitors.

However, these facilities benefit a select few over the majority. Funding for such facilities is a limited part of a federal budget that must cover essential areas like health, education, and the military. Any money diverted towards preparing world-class athletes for international competitions is to some extent a waste as it cuts into the budget for facilities for average people. For example, many inner city youths in poorer neighborhoods lack access to parks and such facilities and this has been identified as one of the factors that allows for poverty to be inherited over generations. Direct the funding away from these expensive gyms for top athletes and it would be possible to build many more facilities that serve a much wider and underserved segment of the population.

In conclusion, despite the less tangible benefits to national cohesiveness, this a negative on level as it favours a talented minority. More resources should be allocated towards facilities for those in greater need.

Total words: 301

Band: 7.5+

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